Great story! Your writing style is very good, and it was an intelligent plot as well. Is there any more like this in the pipeline? What would be cool to see is a prequel to Rachel's Hypnotic Addiction...maybe going back to the start to see how it all began in third person.....or maybe that story can be taken from where it's finished there. Obviously Rachel has been reprogrammed so she's suggestive enough...maybe he can totally corrupt her to entice her friends into his hypnotic spell as well.
